Poems(I think they are)

Started by onishadowolf, September 20, 2009, 09:36:40 PM

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 Darkness surrounds me. I hear a voice, it beckons me. I go to it, the sweet sounds of the siren compel me closer. My next step catches nothing but air, I'm falling now. I hear the siren laughing now, as I fall through the fathomless pitts of darkness. Lead astray again, but the darkness wraps around me whispers to me. The darkness doesn't leave me, or lead me astray.
-The shadows connect us all-

So many desires, all can be fulfilled. Except one, which isn't even a desire, but a need. One to never be fulfilled, the lips of the forsaken. Will never be touched again, pain is nothing compared to emptiness.
-The shadows connect us all-

I look into her eyes, as her cool lips touch mine. I fall into the ocean of her eyes, as her lips become heated with passion. Only to have the spell broken, by the cold steel of the blade thrust into my chest. As darkness surrounds me, those eyes hold me spellbound again.
-The shadows connect us all-

One day I awoke to this masquerade.
With everyone wearing masks in this giant parade.
I look in the mirror and see a crumbling facade.
-The shadows connect us all-

Hey you really like that last line don't you? Sounds great I've seen you do it before it fits quite well in this poem
We are all unique.You my dear are uniquely non-unique.

I really like that last one oni. Good work.
Seek not beauty in battle. Seek not beauty in death. Consider not your own life. If you wish to protect that which must be protected, then strike when your opponent's back is turned.

Thanks ya'll. I wasn't sure about making a topic for these and others.
-The shadows connect us all-

Quote from: onishadowolf on September 20, 2009, 09:40:04 PM
I look into her eyes, as her cool lips touch mine. I fall into the ocean of her eyes, as her lips become heated with passion. Only to have the spell broken, by the cold steel of the blade thrust into my chest. As darkness surrounds me, those eyes hold me spellbound again.

This was far and away my favorite. Very good.

Some of the poems feel like they are unfinished, though. Are they, or is it just me?
...The monster in the cage
       Is coming for you...
         9-29-10

These are the types that you write down in the middle of the night. So, yeah some seem unfinished because the thought wasn't completed.
-The shadows connect us all-

 Well then complete them man! :-P
...The monster in the cage
       Is coming for you...
         9-29-10