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lockesk

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poem
« on: June 21, 2009, 02:11:28 PM »
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I AM NOT DUMB
i watch the world
pick up pieces from the lived that unfold
FEEDING KNOWLEDGE TO MY BRAIN
learning from the thieves listening to priest
psychiatrist in the psycho ward im analyzing you while you label me
GOVERNMENT OFFICIALS
MILITARY MEN
war and honor I THINK BEYOND THEM
philosiphers poetry arguments over views
i sit quietly and obsorbe knowledge for my brain to understand and use
i am not dumb
this i know and believe
continue the world my brain must feed

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Re: poem
« Reply #1 on: June 22, 2009, 03:44:35 AM »
Wow. You're quite good. Of course, you do need some polish, but you do have a definite message in your words. Nicely done.
You might want to check out other poetry threads on the forum - mine, for instance.
There is I in every person,
Only long asleep...

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Re: poem
« Reply #2 on: July 02, 2009, 01:38:19 PM »
I have thought a thousand thoughts
It is what I always do
Trying to find answers to questions
I already knew
What it is that i seek?
You have asked as well I know
as time continues i find myself going against what i believe
I have tricked my brain to think and do as i wish it will percieve
But now it is the question i ask
Why there is wrong and death to be due
Can i not do right to others?
My cheek does not wish to look away
I ought to face and find somlutions
To end the pain that takes play
The answers are already known
The opportunities limitless
Yet again
 I fall to shame
I cannot do this on my own
Humanity has tumbled down
I will not look or bow to ones thrown
It is not one but all
Who has looked another way
And it is not onw but all who have a price to pay

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Re: poem
« Reply #3 on: July 06, 2009, 01:50:50 PM »
I comend you for saying what you think .......BUT.........

MILITARY MEN war and honor I THINK BEYOND YHEM?????

Where would you be?....hmmm......let me think.....

dead mabey...... suffering in some s**thole mabey......

Its easy to take our soldiers for granted because we usually dont have to see them do their job. They deserve respect and I demand they have it, if you think you know of war, I sugest you go back to mothers tit and thank your good soldiers she is there for you.....

without them she would not be, nore would you.


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Re: poem
« Reply #4 on: July 06, 2009, 03:10:21 PM »
Might I suggest that you learn to use both spell check and grammar check before you post things here; especially if it contains allusions to your own vaunted intelligence. Too many of us will use that opening against you if you let us.

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Re: poem
« Reply #5 on: July 07, 2009, 10:19:41 AM »
I was a little more harsh than I meant to be, but Ive seen two of my bestfriends buried in the last year, one was a marine, the other in the army, Im sure you probably meant no disrespect.

that and Ive cut my nicotine intake in half ocer the past couple of days and Im taking it out on every damn body, keep writing, your good at it.

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Re: poem
« Reply #6 on: July 14, 2009, 01:32:45 PM »
I think of god
I do not know who or what it is
religion
I have had my doubts
now I want faith
drugs have been a daily thing for me
I have though I am god
I have thought I am you
but I do not know what to think anymore
I am blind
obliviouse to all
 I seek answers
never finding them
I am in a loop

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Re: poem
« Reply #7 on: July 14, 2009, 02:00:17 PM »
I planted a garden
to show the world I cared
wondering
why these seeds continue to grow
I looked up at the sun
I breathed the air
why have I not been damned
why not am I dead
I am still asking questions over and over in my head
my lover does not love me
I do not know who he is
nor does he know who I really am
I came to water my garden
I was hoping my watermelons were safe
I found them to be destroyed by the lawnmower
by the boyfriend I hate
we lie in bed together
we speak word and we tell lies
I wonder who he is
I continue to come back
I wish to lie in his arms
I care not for money
but I fell i am used
I abuse him with words because I have been abused
he is away in a hospital bed
he is sick
the world has mistreated him as well
suicide
his father died that way
I wish him well
I want things to be better
I continue to try
I will not be a failure
It is why im alive
I will hold him and love him
and hope he speaks true
what comes tommorrow
I do not know
will the sun come up
I hope so

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Re: poem
« Reply #8 on: July 19, 2009, 06:48:27 AM »
One day I awoke to this masquerade.
With everyone wearing masks in this giant parade.
I look in the mirror and see a crumbling facade.
-The shadows connect us all-

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Re: poem
« Reply #9 on: July 20, 2009, 06:13:03 AM »
What was that about, Oni?
There is I in every person,
Only long asleep...

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Re: poem
« Reply #10 on: July 20, 2009, 07:52:16 AM »
 <:smurf I don't know. Just something I came up with on the fly.
-The shadows connect us all-

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Re: poem
« Reply #11 on: July 21, 2009, 01:25:00 AM »
Cool enough, good for you.
There is I in every person,
Only long asleep...

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Re: poem
« Reply #12 on: July 22, 2009, 07:35:39 PM »
Wow you bf sounds messed up! Why do you put up with it? Also the garnen one sounded hippiesh are you a peace punker? Just wondering that's the same style they use

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Re: poem
« Reply #13 on: July 26, 2009, 06:16:26 AM »
i planted this awesome garden i really cared about it.it had squash,tomatoes,peas,bell peppers,jabaneros i dont know if thats how you spell it but they are hotter than jalepenos,oh yeah and watermelon and cantelop but those are gone. Last time i checked i had an onion and a carrot i was exited becaus i planted them. Im stayin somewhere else now so i will make a new one :-D

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Re: poem
« Reply #14 on: July 27, 2009, 02:46:37 AM »
Was that a rhymed confession?
There is I in every person,
Only long asleep...