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lockesk

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Re: poem
« Reply #15 on: July 27, 2009, 07:08:13 AM »
I fall to my knees and I look at the sun
wondering what in the world has my life become
Everything I hoped for has left me with despair
but I cant conprehend
I shrug my shoulders and pretend not to care
a forbidden zone
my emotions
my barrier is strong
for those I allowed in
have done me wrong
yet what can I do
but live and let be
If love was fake then dont speak the word to me

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Re: poem
« Reply #16 on: July 27, 2009, 09:34:51 AM »
Cataclysm
My world has turned upside down
A reverberating dimension
Reality canít be held down
Under an eclipse
Canít define sun or the moon
Yet the emotion Iím feeling is neither happy nor gloom
God is no where to be found
Yet I still question my existence
A matrix a test
A sickly world in which they persist to play games

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Re: poem
« Reply #17 on: August 04, 2009, 07:35:06 AM »
redemption
beneath me lies an alien force
i have found myself
im no longer ashamed
love lost
but i grew stronger in many ways
I have found myself
I no longer need you
I miss you but now i can see
I dont need you to figure out me
I have found myself
Now that your gone I am able to do many things
Before I never dreamed
Never though
I could be something more
I have found myself
Its quite shocking , the personality I now have
My dark days are over
The clouds have stopped pouring rain
And now I know who I am



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Re: poem
« Reply #18 on: August 04, 2009, 08:23:46 AM »
I'm glad you found yourself.These poems truly come from the heart your poems flow nicely as well. Keep it up,Great work!
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Re: poem
« Reply #19 on: August 04, 2009, 08:53:44 AM »
ravinclaw:I comend you for saying what you think .......BUT.........MILITARY MEN war and honor I THINK BEYOND YHEM?????Where would you be?....hmmm......let me think.....dead mabey...... suffering in some s**thole mabey......Its easy to take our soldiers for granted because we usually dont have to see them do their job. They deserve respect and I demand they have it, if you think you know of war, I sugest you go back to mothers tit and thank your good soldiers she is there for you.....without them she would not be, nore would you

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Re: poem
« Reply #20 on: August 04, 2009, 08:56:23 AM »
I care not for moneybut I fell i am usedI abuse him with words because I have been abused

This is so true. I have done the same thing.
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« Reply #21 on: August 04, 2009, 05:31:58 PM »
Nice, Lockesk. I think you haven't only found yourslef but also found a flowing style with a nice rhythm. Good.
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« Reply #22 on: August 04, 2009, 11:35:39 PM »
thank you thank you :-D

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« Reply #23 on: August 08, 2009, 06:28:49 PM »
I like this one but what do you mean by this?..."GOVERNMENT OFFICIALSMILITARY MENwar and honor I THINK BEYOND THEM"
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Re: poem
« Reply #24 on: August 08, 2009, 06:34:06 PM »
"my barrier is strongfor those I allowed in have done me wrongyet what can I dobut live and let beIf love was fake then dont speak the word to me"

This is really good keep it up!
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« Reply #25 on: August 09, 2009, 02:42:28 AM »
Love is never fake. Even a false love is true to an extinct. Takes some time to understand that.
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« Reply #26 on: August 09, 2009, 09:24:14 AM »
military men war and honor i think beyond them. It meens i see they fight and act on stupidity. I thing i see beyond that. Umm its just my opinion though.

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« Reply #27 on: August 09, 2009, 09:26:46 AM »
I dont know abouth that Devinior . It seems i thought it was real but i was to blind to see reaality. :oops:

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« Reply #28 on: August 09, 2009, 09:40:46 AM »
That's why it was real. I mean, in the world of fiction where one can be lured by one's illusions, everything is real. When characters die, they really die, although it's just the actors covered in blood imitation syrup..
Reality's mostly what you make of it.
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« Reply #29 on: August 09, 2009, 10:02:43 AM »
hmmmmmmmm :|